Much is left to the readers imagination which makes this an excellent example of the cliché "Show the story." When the reader is enticed to join in a co-creative bond, the story really comes to life in the minds eye. The rare use of adverbs and economy of words testifies to the writers care. The imagery and allegory are strong. If it were a little shorter and had a stronger conclusion, it would be a first rate example of flash fiction. The dialogue is just a little stiff. Still, this is an outstanding piece wit lots to emulate!

Author's Response: Thanks! The dialog was deliberately written to have the feel of a 19th century didactic story for the young. Like a Victorian translation of Aesop, for instance. So you are really on the mark there, though I intended it and actually don't mind that level of formality. This is rather like a myth or legend, not an everyday tale after all. ;D